寫作指導:最實際的會考英語作文獲取高分的方法!
英語寫作是學生學習的一個盲點,缺乏對寫作的專門訓練和反思,老師的工作量大,造成作文講評大多數時候只談現象,因此學生學得也不具體、不深入,忽略寫作技能的提高,甚至誤認為只要句子結構正確,無單詞拼寫錯誤就應該得滿分。同學們應該走出對英語寫作認識上的誤區。那麼怎樣才能寫出一篇優秀作文,而在會考中獲取高分呢?
一、寫作訣竅
總體把握,要點齊全;人稱時態,邏輯清楚;
關鍵詞彙,動詞第一;組詞成句,結構完整;
組句成文,連詞增色;此路不通,繞道迂迴;
字跡工整,留好印象;從句適量,高分有望。
二、寫作步驟
1.認真審題。審題包括要點、格式、詞數以及此篇文章要傳遞給讀者什麼樣的信息,告誡讀者什麼(即寫作目的)。
2.確定文體和時態。確定文體後,根據不同文體的特點和要求進行組織材料;同時確定出該篇文章的總時態與時態的變化。
3.寫完要點,但不隨意發揮。
4.先草稿,後抄寫。
三、習作點評
[2004年全國中學生英語能力競賽初賽國三組] (14分)
Choose one of your hobbies and write an article for the school magazine about it. tell the magazine readers.
﹒what exactly your hobby is;
﹒when and how you became interested in this hobby;
﹒why you enjoy your hobby;
﹒about your hopes and plans for the future.
寫作要求:
1. 根據所提供的內容,適當拓展想象空間,靈活地將提供的信息體現在文章中。
2. 條理清楚,語句通順,書寫清晰、規範。
3. 詞數60-80。
[學生習作a]
My hobby is read books. when i was seven years old .
I became interested in reading books. I like needing books
Because there are a lot of useful things in books. I can learn
a lot of knowledge from books. Books also can teach me
how to be a good person . Books even can solve many
problems for me . I will read more good books to improve
myself.
①改為reading books,動詞作表語時應該用動名詞。
②also的位置應放在can之後。
[點評]:檔次9-11分。
①要點不全,漏掉最後一個要點。
②句子基本無誤,能正確傳遞信息給讀者但文章不流暢,句子與句子之間過渡不自然,給讀者感覺在回答上述① ② ③問題。
③有少量錯誤。
[學生習作b]
My hobby is reading ing books is very enjoyable .
When I was young, my mother used to tell me a story before
I went to bed every night stories were so interesting
that I always felt they weren't enough . So I began to read
books by myself le by little I became interested in
reading . I can learn much knowledge and many interesting
things all over the world I read books , I can enjoy the
beautiful sentences . At the same time I can improve my
writing . I want to be a writer in the future, so I must study
hard and read more books so that my dream can come true .
①開門見山、點題。
②真情流露,理由充分。
③文中帶圈的連詞使用得恰當,使文章過渡自然、
④巧妙使用句型以表決心。
[點評]:檔次13-14分。
①清楚表達寫作目的,要點齊全。
②語言表達靈活多樣,字裏行間流露出真情實感,文章有感染力。
③恰當使用連詞和從句,語言流暢,且無錯誤,是一篇高質量的作文。
[高分突破]
①文體:記敍文。
②要點:what → when →how → why → hope and plan for the future。
③時態:一般現在時,一般過去時,一般將來時的自然變化。
內容具有開放性,但它也是"控制性"的寫作試題,因此不能隨意發揮,要善於抓信息,寫完要點。選用這兩篇學生真實習作,一是因為他們選材相同,二是因為他們都是英語成績優秀的同學。同學b靈活使用連詞so…that, so, little by little, when, so that等,恰到好處地使用新句型和短語used to, became interested in, come true……等,使內容豐富,讀起來優美流暢。其實這些表達同學a也會,只是缺乏技術加工。通過這兩篇作文點評,同學們便能悟出其中的奧妙。
四、培養途徑
1. 根據老師佈置的寫作內容,獨立完成一篇寫作。
2. 與同伴合作,交流自己的寫作,通過交流找出各自作文中寫得好的地方和優美的句子,合作創造一篇新的文章,供大家欣賞。
3. 找老師點評,請求老師指點,尤其是怎樣潤色。
4. 自己糾錯,寫下反思。
五、備考演練
a
縉雲山是重慶著名的遊覽勝地,每天有大量的遊客。請你根據下面提供的信息寫一篇報道,説明現在的遊客在環境保護方面的變化。
寫作要求:
1. 詞數在100左右。
2. 條理清楚,語句通順。
3. 開頭已寫好,但不計入總詞數。
Jinyun mountain is a famous place of interest …
b
閲讀電視廣告詞:"if we don't save water , the last drop of water will be a tear-drop."根據提示,寫一篇60-80詞的短文。
提示:
1. 生活離不開水。
2. 可飲用水在減少。
3. 水污染嚴重。
4. 應保護水源,再利用水。思路點撥與參考答案
a. [思路點撥]:
①文體:記敍文。
②時態:一般過去時態,一般現在時態。採用正反對比的寫作手法,增加感染力。
③寫作目的:告訴讀者保護環境的重要性。
Jinyun mountain is a famous place of interest . Every day a lot of tourists come here to enjoy its beauty. but a few years ago,some of them paid no attention to protecting the environment. they threw their rubbish,such as plastic bags,fruit skins and waste paper on the ground. sometimes they broke trees,picked flowers and killed birds. Some even made fires in the woods to cook food. How dangerous it was. luckily, great changes have taken place here. tourists are used to putting their rubbish into dustbins, and they are doing their best to protect the birds and plants as well. They bring their own meals instead of cooking to prevent starting a forest fire in the mountains. All these changes make us very happy.
b. [思路點撥]:
①夾敍夾議(説明現狀,談談感想)。
②時態:一般現在時態。
③廣告詞的含義--水很重要,應保護和再利用(寫作意圖)。
Water is very important to humans. we can't live without water. The water we can drink is falling. but some people don't seem to care about it. They waste a lot of water. They pour dirty water into rivers and lakes. Water pollution is getting more and more serious. So we must do something to stop the pollution. We not only protect the water but also find ways to reuse it. if we don't do this, the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.
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